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Post by Dan Hellman on Sept 4, 2009 15:01:35 GMT -5
The scene opens up in a big mostly empty room. The wallpaper of the room is dipped in bright red color, on the wall their is a huge poster with "Dan Hellman" written in blue.On front of the poster their is a brown steel chair ready to be sat on. A few minutes have passed as a guy with a hat, and long brown over cote slowly walks over and sits down on the chair, his face was really hard to see so the cameramen failed to identify the mystery man.-My skill in FCW here is not seems to be rubbing off, I am not doing that well I even had thoughts to ask for a release I was inactive throughout the PPV but all of those pretty boys back shouldn't take that lightly just yet ,all of you better listen up good,I am back and I am ready for action.The mystery man slowly removes his hat and looks up at the camera, right after that he is been identified as a FCW superstar Dan Hellman.Dan Hellman-Now as you all know that the man in the hat is me all of you should know that my bad luck is going to end in my next match.In my next match I will be the superior man I will be standing on top of my victim I will show that world what am I made of and not the forget that, this is my waring message to all the FCW boys out their,I am back!!After saying that Dan Hellman shoots up from his chair and walks towards the main door and turn of that light.Feedback,comments,disrespect and slang is welcomed.
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Jason Evans
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'The only thing greatness needs it himself. And that is me.' Formely Evan Bourne
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Post by Jason Evans on Sept 4, 2009 19:20:10 GMT -5
Well, I guess that you have improved a little but, work on the length, and you have a near perfect RP. Kudos my freind.
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Post by Dan Hellman on Sept 5, 2009 9:43:16 GMT -5
I know that is my biggest enemy in rp length I will do my best to make my next one longer
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Jason Evans
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'The only thing greatness needs it himself. And that is me.' Formely Evan Bourne
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Post by Jason Evans on Sept 5, 2009 16:32:36 GMT -5
I'm not trying to sound like a douche or anything, but I just wanted to give you advice. That might have been one of your best RP's here in FCW. Nice job my freind.
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Post by Dan Hellman on Sept 5, 2009 18:35:07 GMT -5
of course it is I only did like 2 lol
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Jason Evans
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'The only thing greatness needs it himself. And that is me.' Formely Evan Bourne
Posts: 806
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Post by Jason Evans on Sept 6, 2009 17:44:40 GMT -5
Damn, y'all just don't stop posting...and neither do I. And why the frig am I trying to act like a wigger?!
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Post by Dan Hellman on Sept 7, 2009 13:55:30 GMT -5
lol
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