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[Dan Hellman]

The scene opens up in a empty arena with one stop light on. In the middle of the ring their seems to be a steel chair and a person sitting on it. The camera slowly zooms on the person sitting on the chair.

Dan Hellman-In The middle of this ring I took out The Miz without on problem it was like stealing candy form a baby...it was easy with a lot of whining..and the next person to receive the same fate is Matt Kraven just like The Miz I am not too worried about you it will still be like stealing candy form a baby.

Dan Hellman stands up as the camera men takes a few steps back.

Dan Hellman-I will watch as you recover from the blows I give you as the ref raises my hand for I am the victor.*Dan Hellman smiles* And after the match you are going to whine about how you could have but you didn't. My friend I am so sure that I am going to win that I can literally taste it. Just imagine thousands of people chanting my name and booing as soon as they see you. And lets face it you can't win even if I face ten of you at the same time.

Dan Hellman walks around the ring as the camera men tries to follow him around.

Dan Hellman-You see Matt you never can defeat me and you never will. Winning this match is not a thing I have to do.....winning this match is my destiny. The reason I came here is to be a legend and if anyone stands in my way I will destroy with all my might. You will be destroyed and be stalked by me as long as the match goes on. I will not back down I will hell fire on you for I am Dan Hellman let my name swing around your head over over again Matt.

Dan Hellman grabs the camera and shakes it.

Dan Hellman-When they that I am not normal they are not kidding..... Matt Kraven.....that name will not be know as "Simply the best* It will be know as "Simply the worst" Matthew....after this Tuesday you will be afraid to step in the ring with me again.

After chanting those words Dan Hellman drops the camera on the floor as the cameramen pick it up.

Dan Hellman-You are going to be beaten and battered after the ref's hand slaps down for the Three count. Let me explain it to you I-WILL-WIN!

After saying that Dan Hellman sits back down on the chair as the screen fades to black.


Feedback,Disgrace,comment,Tips anything will be welcomed.

[mattkraven]

The promo was pretty good, but I think some of the things Dan said was a little cliche, or generic, like the stalking part.

Also, go ahead and put in more description. Instead of just saying he's sitting on a steel chair in the ring, say what he's wearing, how his hair is, how the lighting reflects off of his body, what color the chair is, etc, etc.

And this is just the graphic designer in me - but although red and green go together for Christmas, we learned that red and green together, is a very bad thing.

Keep it up though man. I look forward to seeing your next one.

[Dan Hellman]

Thank you I have been am role player for 7 year....but I was inactive for like 4 years so I am just going to refresh my rping anyway thanks for reminding me those things...anyway I didn't know that red and green is a very dad thing thanks for the heads up man

[Edge]

You are showing REAL good improvement
This promo is way better than anything else you've done
If you keep this up, in no time you'll be going places.
You have my vote for Most Improved

[Dan Hellman]

Thanks my friend it's all thanks to my bro he guided my through it